Comments on: I Love This Poem http://linebreak.org/blog/2009/12/31/i-love-this-poem/ A weblog from the editors of Linebreak Wed, 03 Mar 2010 16:24:08 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9 hourly 1 By: D.W. Lichtenberg http://linebreak.org/blog/2009/12/31/i-love-this-poem/comment-page-1/#comment-795 D.W. Lichtenberg Fri, 08 Jan 2010 22:20:18 +0000 http://linebreak.org/blog/?p=1521#comment-795 Hey Ash, Out of curiosity, what is your grudge with "writing prose and inserting breaks"? You stated this in a derogatory sort of way, as though this is implicitly weaker and means the language has been less considered. And when you say "prose", I assume what you're really thinking of is something more colloquial and less lyric? I actually think that too much of poetry is so concerned with lyricism that it forgets about colloquial language. I'd say I agree more with William Carlos Williams that more poets should try to use only words he's heard used in the last week. It's the populist in me. Thoughts? Cheers D.W. Lichtenberg THE ANCIENT BOOK OF HIP Hey Ash,

Out of curiosity, what is your grudge with “writing prose and inserting breaks”? You stated this in a derogatory sort of way, as though this is implicitly weaker and means the language has been less considered. And when you say “prose”, I assume what you’re really thinking of is something more colloquial and less lyric?

I actually think that too much of poetry is so concerned with lyricism that it forgets about colloquial language. I’d say I agree more with William Carlos Williams that more poets should try to use only words he’s heard used in the last week. It’s the populist in me.

Thoughts?

Cheers

D.W. Lichtenberg
THE ANCIENT BOOK OF HIP

]]> By: John Schellhase http://linebreak.org/blog/2009/12/31/i-love-this-poem/comment-page-1/#comment-786 John Schellhase Sat, 02 Jan 2010 23:54:07 +0000 http://linebreak.org/blog/?p=1521#comment-786 Wonderful poem. Thanks, Ash. I don't know if you guys remember me, but I was in the MFA in translation program a few semesters back; I was the quiet classicist in a few classes with Brock. I didn't finish out my time in the program and am currently a Peace Corps volunteer in the Philippines, but I follow the blog (both here and the uark blog) and I read linebreak every week. I also just signed up at swindle. I hope all's well back in Fayetteville. And congratulations to Johnathon for the Best New Poets nod! Wonderful poem. Thanks, Ash. I don’t know if you guys remember me, but I was in the MFA in translation program a few semesters back; I was the quiet classicist in a few classes with Brock. I didn’t finish out my time in the program and am currently a Peace Corps volunteer in the Philippines, but I follow the blog (both here and the uark blog) and I read linebreak every week. I also just signed up at swindle. I hope all’s well back in Fayetteville. And congratulations to Johnathon for the Best New Poets nod!

]]> By: Richard L. Provencher http://linebreak.org/blog/2009/12/31/i-love-this-poem/comment-page-1/#comment-785 Richard L. Provencher Sat, 02 Jan 2010 13:47:37 +0000 http://linebreak.org/blog/?p=1521#comment-785 You are right; George David Clarke's poem is beautiful, a life of journeys. Below is a poem I wish to share: AWAKENING mist embraces a pattern of spider webs straddling fir branches in artistic symmetry thread-coated veneer of morning silver. In the stillness wary bullfrogs pause their bellicose croaks restrained and mallards bob in lazy spirals aside shore’s lining cloudburst as umbrellas masking duck-plowed trails. Nature provides a menu landscaped in early rising. © 2008 Richard L. Provencher first published Volume 2 Spring 2009 Paragon 2 A Compendium of Writing Memorial University - Newfoundland ISBN 978-0-88901-397-1 You are right; George David Clarke’s poem is beautiful, a life of journeys. Below is a poem I wish to share:

AWAKENING

mist embraces
a pattern of spider webs
straddling fir branches
in artistic symmetry
thread-coated
veneer of morning silver.

In the stillness wary
bullfrogs pause
their bellicose croaks
restrained

and mallards bob
in lazy spirals
aside shore’s lining
cloudburst as umbrellas
masking
duck-plowed trails.

Nature provides a menu
landscaped
in early rising.

© 2008 Richard L. Provencher

first published Volume 2 Spring 2009
Paragon 2 A Compendium of Writing
Memorial University – Newfoundland
ISBN 978-0-88901-397-1

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